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Batgirl's poems

Post by Xxbatgirlxx on Tue Mar 29, 2011 1:30 pm

I wasn't sure if this was where to put the writing but I do some poem stuff and I just wanted some feedback :3. PS Sorry one bad word but I censored it :]

Hero

I want to be
Someone special
Someone important
Someone to change the world

I want to be
Someone who can save a life
Like those people in the movies
Like those people in the comics

Stopping the Joker
And maybe Dr. Oct. too
And have my own symbol
My own kick a** car too

I want to fly through the air
Seeing Gotham bellow me
Or even Metropolis
My own city, my own domain

Where I’ll be feared by the bad
And loved by the innocent
And have a sidekick
To share it with

But maybe I can
Be like the people in the movies
Like in the comics
To save a life

Maybe not wearing a costume
Or a cape and mask
Maybe by just being me
I can be a hero

I can touch someone’s life
I can make a difference
I can be the hero of this town
Stop the bad, help the good

I’ll be a hero of my own




Imaginary

I want to escape
I want to go into my own world
Where you can’t tell me the sky is blue
Where I can say it’s red and you can’t deny it
Where I can pretend pokemon are real
And you can’t deny it

I can say that there is no war
There are no causalities
There are no bad people
I can say we all get along
No matter our differences
No matter our disagreements

I can say that candy can fall from the sky
And no one can starve
Maybe a few toothaches
But I’ll get rid of those too
And all will be well
No one will be sad

But the minute that bell rings
And it’s time to go to next class
My own world collapse
And reality floods in
Wars are back, so are toothaches
Pokemon aren’t real and the sky is blue

Oh well
It’ll come back to me
At least I can escape
Into my world
Where all those wonderful things
Will come flooding back
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Re: Batgirl's poems

Post by LostShadowSoul on Tue Mar 29, 2011 3:28 pm

Wonderful! Imaginary is sweet and funny (the sky ins't blue...its a purple unicorn named bob!) and hero touches a deeper level. It's nice to meet another poet who doesn't use punctuation, I use it in some of mine, but most has none. People think that its proper to use punctuation in a poem, I think not using it gives the poem a seemless feel when reading it. It certains does give yourless that smooth feeling!
I hope to see more.
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Post by DCfan100 on Wed Mar 30, 2011 4:51 am

Very nice Very Happy

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Post by Xxbatgirlxx on Wed Mar 30, 2011 3:51 pm

Thanks guys =D
And ya hate punctuation, poems aren't meant to have any order (in my opinion) it's just suppose to express yourself at least that's my opinion xD but awesome that you don't use it either since most do D:
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Post by LostShadowSoul on Wed Mar 30, 2011 4:55 pm

Bad punctuation, No one likes you.
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Post by Xxbatgirlxx on Wed Mar 30, 2011 5:00 pm

>_> Thanks? I think you just gave me motivation for a new poem though even though. I'll make sure to have better punctuation from now on. . . ?
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Post by LostShadowSoul on Wed Mar 30, 2011 5:09 pm

What? Not having punctuation is fine! I was saying that I didn't like punctuation beacuse he's complicated. Or can be complicated...?

I just confused myself.

But seriously, your poems are amazing.
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